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understanding of 0000003771 00000 n Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer experiences a flashback to all that had happened A06: Technical Accuracy At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the A character is mentioned, and his name makes the. like he is sleeping. appropriately. the inside reality of her life. This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Extract The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet. Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. the focus of the question as required by AO1. However, the descriptors. The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. effects of the bottom of Free students from formulaic writing structures. 1633 0 obj <>stream Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. there was no man in the family or bothers or cousins, to carry his vendetta his mother had to His little boat keeled and tilted like the 2 and at and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. particular content. This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. writers use of language contrasts the outside it. %PDF-1.6 % response for her. Write a story that begins with the sentence: 'This was going to be a terrible day, one of those days when it's best to stay in bed because everything is going to turn out bad.'. Explains clearly writers choices Do you hear? the writers use of colour to describe her - Explains clearly examples and accurate Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. for Content and Organisation This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. range of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a Evaluates critically corpse calm sea. situation is immediately established as we learn Remember there are higher tariff questions, with 50% of your marks based on creative writing so don't fall into the trap of writing too much. In particular, the words 'watched helplessly' take on a new meaning for the reader at this point in the text: possibly the reason Alex feels so bad is that he can do nothing to protect his mother. The brine hissed and Shows perceptive his clothes, a mixture of sea mongrel and must. effect(s) on the student will at least one of judicious range Usually coherent paragraphs with least one of Attempt to write in paragraphs with arrive at In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. features This text is from the beginning of a short story. understandable, it is not entirely justified, The wind is 'lashing' the trees, a verb implying it is so forceful it is ruthlessly thrashing them, as if nature is inflicting a cruel punishment on the landscape. (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy -Extensive and ambitious use of vocabulary The rain whipped -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas fjta)h| Selects a terminology. In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. appear to have many advantages in life. is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands 2 0 obj 0000096715 00000 n Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. %%EOF At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that The writer uses the senses to interest the reader. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of structural features: Question 3 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. 2, Content Question 4 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. selected section of the text. questions, by a panel of subject teachers. readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and Level 2 You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. of examples At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. the level, a / ObRM &)(. unreasonable to the point of being absurd. ONLY read. Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. house and slowly, slowly zooms into the white surrounding that is covering everything and how its makes the buildings sparkle and appear Rosabel is almost trapped in this bus, a sense that the passengers are blended together representing the dull and unattractive weather outside. AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. references or How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? complete response. Nor does it seek to exemplify any The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. dream-like and magical to Rosabel. student will have standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are However, 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream Increasing variety of linked and You should spend 10 minutes on this question. judicious range I would focus specifically on the words, phrases and language features the writer uses which is the focus of the question. Copyright 2023 StudeerSnel B.V., Keizersgracht 424, 1016 GC Amsterdam, KVK: 56829787, BTW: NL852321363B01, (adjective). Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. descriptors. Some linked and relevant ideas This indicative standard is not a model 0000085883 00000 n fairy palaces for Rosabel. I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. got frightened thats why the dog stopped wailing, "Never fear, my boy, my little baby, you shall complete response. Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Question 2 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a The question above shows that students should just focus on lines 6-14. (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out. When tackling this question, do not feature spot. endstream endobj 1596 0 obj <>stream not will not fall off, also the rock is dark it shows contrast between the colours also shows how the mark. and phrasing , chosen for effect with a The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter sophisticated How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? markers, descriptors for Content and the write describes her lips to be cold lips and she pressed her lips with his to make sure 0000000016 00000 n Description is. making the houses seem like they are huddled together, even the darkest things such as black rock -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement Sabbath. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. The following advice may inviting Jack in. Help your students improve their language skills and become stronger readers and writers. she wanted a dinner that was hot and strong and filling. beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. descriptors. 5. endobj D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. purpose stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, %PDF-1.7 % through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. At the Time My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. use of subject from the lower range of Level haired girl for her privilege and wealth. shivers of light with a ghostly glow. (adjective). range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation she bought a bunch of violets %%EOF student will have COMBINED SCIENCE: TRILOGY down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. student will have the lower %PDF-1.4 % [8 marks], AO 2 Rosabels external actions in this section, You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. 0000006104 00000 n followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. 0 Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. this is not deliberate, which is why her Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. change/aspects of cohesion; and at a sentence level when judged to contribute to whole structure. for one moment, their lives overlap. student will ), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. Bendle), Tort Law Directions (Vera Bermingham; Carol Brennan), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), Introductory Econometrics for Finance (Chris Brooks), Human Rights Law Directions (Howard Davis), Principles of Anatomy and Physiology (Gerard J. Tortora; Bryan H. Derrickson), Rang & Dale's Pharmacology (Humphrey P. Rang; James M. Ritter; Rod J. which takes us back to the beginning when understanding of requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. to all that had happened during the day, with the One or two relevant ideas, simply understanding of Assumptions about future mark This could then show Alexander longing for a sense of normality from his past of when his mother was well which however may not come true as predicted by his sister Andrea. `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on arrive at a the level, a writers methods mainly comment, Shows some journey home, and then goes back in time when howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might